雅思作文范文
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2023年2月12日发(作者：)（七分范文）Somepeoplebelievethatstudyingat
universityorcollegeisthebestroutetoasuccessfulcareer,while
othersbelievethatitisbettertogetajobstraightafterschool.
Discussbothviewsandgiveyouropinion.
Whentheyfinishschool,teenagersfacethedilemmathatwhetherto
herearesomebenefitsto
gettingajobstraightafterschool,Iwouldarguethatitisbettertogoto
collegeoruniversity.
Theoptiontostartworkstraightafterschoolis
ungpeoplewanttostartearning
way,theycanbecomeindependent,
sof
theircareer,youngpeoplewhodecidetofindwork,ratherthan
continuetheirstudies,llhavethe
chaneetogainrealexperieneeandlearnpracticalskillsrelatedtotheir
ylead
topromotionsandasuccessfulcareer.
Ontheotherhand,Ibelievethatitismorebeneficialforstudentsto
y,academicqualificationsarerequiredin
mple,itisimpossibletobecomeadoctor,
teacher
ult,university
graduateshaveaccesstomoreandbetterjobopportunities,andthey
tendtoearnhighersalariesthan
ly,thejobmarket
isbecomingincreasinglycompetitive,andsometimestherearehun
dredsofapplicantsforonepositioninacompany.
Youngpeoplewhodonothavequalificationsfromauniversityorcollege
willnotbeabletocompete.
Forthereasonsmentionedabove,itseemstomethatstudentsare
morelikelytobesuccessfulintheircareersiftheycontinuetheirstudies
beyondschoollevel.
以上就是这篇雅思写作7分范文的全部内容，字数足够。这
篇雅思写作范文所占的观点是应该在大学继续学习，但是对另外
的观点也做了相应的论述，所用的篇章结构的语法结构都值得大家借鉴。
Band5
Somepeoplethinkthatuniversitiesshouldprovide
graduateswiththeknowledgeandskillsneeded
thinkthatthetruefuncti
onofauniversityshouldbetogiveaccesstokno
wledgeforitsownsake,regardlessofwhetherthe
,inyour
opinion,shouldbethemainfunctionofauni
versity?
Whatknowledgeandskillsshoulduniversities
peoplethinkthatthetruefunctionofuniversities
provideknowledgefortheirownpurpose,butno
wadays,moreandmorepeoplepointoutthatuni
versitiesshouldprovidegraduateswiththekno
wledgeandskillsaccordingtotheworkplace.
Thefirstreasonforuniversitiesshouldprovide
theseknowledgeandskillisthestudents\'n
sly,themostofthestudentsgoto
universitypurposeofistogetsomeknowledge
andskillswhichcouldmakethemhavetheability
versitydoesnotprovidethese
knowledgeandskills,thestudentsmightnotgeta
result,theuniversitywouldloseitsstudents.
Moreover,providingknowledgeandskillsn
eededintheworkplacemakesauniversity
skillsandinformationalways
areinitiatedintheworkplace,sofocusingonthe
needsoftheworkplacetheuniversitycouldget
soundstrategiestodoresearchandmakeitmore
modernization.
Lastly,providingtheseknowledgeandskillscould
benefitourcountrywhichusuallygivesafinancial
supporttouniversities.
Havingtheseknowledgeandskills,students
aremoreeasytogetajob,andthiscanmakeour
countries\'economystrong.
Inconclusion,itcanbesaidthatprovidingthe
knowledgeandskillswhichtheworkplaceneeds
iseveryuniversityfunction.
只能拿到5分的原因：
一、这个题目中有两方的观点：some及
others的，很明显这位考生在后面的论证过程中完
全忽视了others的观点,都在一味地论证some的
观点的正确性，于是考官给出的评语是：itdoesnot
addressallpartsofthequestion.
写作建议NO.3:Donotneglectanypart,oryou
willregretyourmark.
不要忽视任何东西，否则你的分数会让你很伤心。
二、这位考生在连接词和复杂句型上都表现得不
错，可是他太偷懒了，knowledgeand
skill这个词组一共用了9次，这种高频率的
repetition让这位考生付出了比较惨重的代价，所以
看者希望你们能够汲取这样的教训，多注意
sbasic
Paraphrase的练习。尤其是常考的考试主题所可能
涉及到的高频单词更是要做好homework.
knowledgeandskill就属于top3的高频考题的教
育类，所以这类的词汇一定是多多准备才对，如
expertise,
conversanee,instruction,competenee,
aptitude,technique,prowess,dexterity都可以拿
来替换这两个词。
写作建议N0.4:Paraphrasehelpsyouparachute
intoahigherband.
改写能助你拿到高分。
Band6
Somepeoplethinkthatasenseofcompetitionin
believe
thatchildrenwhoaretaughttoco-operaterather
than
sboth
theseviewsandgiveyourownopinion.
Nowadays,purposeofeducationbeingchanged
resomepeoplewhothinkthat
competitioninchildrenshouldbemade,also
othersbelievethatchildrenwhoaretaughttoco-
operateaswellasbecomemoreusefuladults.
Thereareadvantagesanddisadvantagesfor
bothofthearguments.
Tobeginwith,whatisgoodifasenseof
competitioninchildrenismade?Theycould
developthemselvesmoreandmoreastheylearn
provethis,inKorea,itispopular-evencommon
now-tohaveatutorwhocometostudent\'s
housetoteachextra
piecesofstudywithpayingalotofmoney.
Theylearnfasterthanwhattheylearnatschool.
Furthermore,duringthevocations,students
studyabroadtolearnEnglishfora
have
experimentssuchasstudyabroad,itisoneofthe
greatestpluspointtogotothefamouswell-known
er,therearefourbigschool
examandtwonationalexaminationstotest
students\'lly,onlythe
highest40%cangotothegoodquality
highschoolsandcollegeschildrenlearnasmuch
astheycan,towinthecompetitiontoobtaingood
qualityschools.
Ontheotherhand,astheyarebusytoenterthe
schoolsandstudyindividuallywiththeirown
tutors,comeselfish.
Theybecomecarelessanddon\'thelpothersa
illbenoco-operati
onsforthem.
Then,whyaretherecompaniesformanypeople
toworkin?eachofthemareclever,however,
thereareweakpartsandstrongpartsforeach
-operateistoimprovethispart.
Peopletalkandlistentowhatothersthinkingof
uldalsobeagreatopportunity
tolearninsteadoflearningalonewithone
teacher.
Inconclusion,Istronglyagreewiththatchildren
shouldbetaughttoco-operateratherthan
learn
together,worktogethertodevelopeachother.
therefore,Iwantparentsandteacherstoeducate
childrenconcentratingonco-operation,not
competeandrankingthem.
问题分析：
从论证大主题的角度来说，这一篇的最后的
收尾是co-operation更重要的成立的，但是这位考
生在文字数量分配上缺乏规划，分配
给competition的文字明显多于给co-operation的，
这样就给了考官一个非常合情合理的借口扣分，实
在是遗憾啊！
写作建议NO.5:Ifitisyourpreferenee,giveit
morereferenee.
如果你更认同那个观点，那就在这个观点上多写点
吧。
如果我们进一步看下Body段里的细节内
容，其实这位考生的语法功力和逻辑论证能力比上
面那位5分同学还要差，但是这篇文章把题目中的
两个方面都提到，没有犯我的
N0.3建议中的错误。除此之外，文字总量上这一篇
文章叫上两篇都有绝对的优势，所
以再强调下数量真的也很重要。
写作建议N0.6:Aquantitativechangecausesa
qualitativechange.
量变带来质变。
Somepeoplesaythatthegovernmentshouldnot
putmoneyonbuildingtheatresandsportsstadiums.
Theyshouldspendmoremoneyonmedicalcareand
education.
Doyouagreeordisagree?
Muchdiscussionconcerningallocationofresourcesassumesthatthe
governmentshouldspendmoneyonmedicineandeducationrather
inion,thisissueshould
beexaminedfromtheangleofwhethertheinvestmentbenefitsthe
greatmajorityofthepopulation.
Theinstitutionsofmedicalcareandeducation,undoubtedly,
shouldreceivepriorityintheallocationofagovernment\'s
expenditures,atthe
thoughtofmillionsofchildrenfromdeprivedbackgroundswhonowget
asubstandardeducation,
andwhowouldrequirearelativelyhighqualityofeducationiftheyare
toenjoyanythingapproachingequalityofopportunityinlaterlife.
Anotherpressingneedofsocietyisimprovementofmedicalcarefor
theadultpoor,fortheaged,andsoforthdownthelist.
Theatresandsportsstadiumsareinstitutionsforpromotinghuman
ssfultheatricaleventisanexcitingandstimulating
experience,whetheritoccursinagrandtheatreorahighschool
torsaswellasthoseinvolvedintheproductionfeel
stadiums,ontheotherhand,attractmillionsof
remillions
watchgamesontelevision,readabouttheminnewspapers,and
ore,canwesaythattheseare
unnecessarypublicexpendituresthegovernmentshouldignore?
Inconclusion,todaymanisbecomingevermoreawareofhis
neand
educationareneedsthatwerecognize,butare
contactswiththeatricalorsportseventsalsobasicneeds?(250words)
Somepeoplebelievethatstudentswhowantto
gotouniversityaftergraduationfromhighschool
shouldhaveaboutoneyear\'stimetogetajobto
obtainworkexperienceorhaveatraveltoenlargetheirvision.
Doyouagreeordisagree?Whatisyouropinion?
Highschoolstudentswhointendtostudyat
universityshouldattendtertiaryeducationafter
doneyear\'stimedoingajobo
acquireworkexperienceortotravelforbroadeningone\'svisionis,to
mymind,awasteoftimeandenergy.
First,universityeducationisthecontinuationof
highschooleducationforthosestudentswhowant
topursuetheirlearningatanadvancedlevel.A
breakofoneyearfromacademicstudywill
probablyweakenonesmemoryofwhathasbeen
learned,especiallyforthosewhowillstudysuchtheoreticalsubjectsas
mathematics,physicsorchemistry.
Besides,manynationshaveestablishedoneexaminationthatall
example,
whofailsintheexaminationwillbedeniedofadmissionintoa
university.
Furthermore,oneyear\'sworkortraveldoesnot
helpstudentsmuchintheiracademicstudiesatuniversitybecauseitis
unpredictableforoneexperiencetobeintegratedintoone\'essMidi
specificsubjects,some
subjects,suchasMBA,requirestudentstohaveworkexperience,one
year\'sworkexperience,however,isnotsufficienttomeetthe
requirementsofthreeorfiveyears,andone\'sorkexperienceshould,
afterall,berelatedtomanagement.
swork
Toconclude,Iwouldrathersuggestthatuniversity\'scurriculum
allowtheintegrationofacademicstudywithpracticaltrainingforthe
compensationforstudents\'lackofwork
experience.(250words)
Itissuggestedthatalltheyoungadultsshouldun
dertakeaperiodofunpaidworkhelpingpeopleinthe
bringmorebenefitsordrawbackstothe
communityandtheyoungpeople?
范文:
Inmodernsocieties,itisincreasinglypopularthat
youngpeoplevolunteeron
weekendsinthelocalcommunityservicecentertohelp
heyoungstersdoitinaregular
way,thebenefitsareobvioustoboththecommunityand
theseyoungadultsalthoughtherearesomeminor
drawbacksaswell.
Itcanbearguedthattheadvantagesofdoingunpaid
,whenanold
personfeelssick,thevolunteerscouldofferfirstaidbefore
se,ifadisabled
personhasdifficultydoingsomedailyactivitiessuchas
shopping,theassistaneefromyoungvolunteersisindispe
er,asfarastheyoungpeopleareconcern
ed,theycoulddevelopthesenseofresponsibility,indepe
ndenceaswellasinterpersonalskillsintheprocessofhelp
way,peoplemaylive
inharmonyinthecommunity.
Nevertheless,thedownsidesofvolunteercommunity
,inthecitylikeShan
ghai,anincreasingnumberofgraduatesfinditharderto
,ifalloftheyoungadults
arerequiredtodofull-timeunpaidjobinafixedperiod,
someofthemwouldhavenoincomesource,whichisun
tion,itisbelievedthat
communityservicecouldpossiblytakeuptheirtimeof
acquiringknowledge.
Therefore,comparedwiththemeritsofvolunteercom
munityserviceofferedbytheyoungadults,thedemeritsof
thatarejustafewbutcannotbeoverlooked.