2023年12月6日发(作者：)
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2009高考英语写作预测系列讲座（二）
健康生活
本讲座是让你写一篇关于健康生活的文章，介绍如何才能保持健康的生活。根据写作要求，首先你需要认真审题，确定文章的体裁，时态和段落。然后，你要列出提纲，注意要点要全。最后，适当扩充要点，形成一篇完整的文章。
写作指导：
一：审题
本文的体裁属议论文，应以一般现在时为主，三段式为宜，人称以第二人称为好。第一段简述健康生活的重要作用，引出话题。第二段给出健康生活的三条建议。第三段总结概括。
二：列提纲
Outline of the passage:
HEALTHY LIVING
Paragraph 1 to put forward three pieces of advice to keep healthy
Paragraph 2 to list the advice：good foods，enough sleep，plenty of exercise
（key words:good diet, avoid, eat more, overweight,enough sleep, feel tired,
plenty of exercise, strong and fit,improves,helps）
Paragraph 3 to conclude the passage
三: 所涉及到本单元的词汇和短语。
diet, fit, normal, overweight，fat, anxious，take exercise
四:扩充要点,连词成句。
学生习作 Healthy living
Good health is the most valuable thing a person can keep health①, you must eat the
right foods ,get enough sleep ,and have normal exercise.
Good② diet is very important for good foods with too many③ sugar and fat. Eat more high-protein foods,vegetables,and fruits. Remember you are what you eat. Eat④ too
much food can easily lead to overweight.
Enough sleep is also must get 8 or 9 hours of sleep every t
enough sleep ,you will feel tired and sometime⑤anxious. Please make sure that you have
enough sleep every day.
Finally,take normal exercise every se help ⑥you fight against diseases and lose
weigh-----makingyou strong and g running,swimming,bicycling,basketball,tabletennis
are all good exercises.
If you can do like ⑦the above, you are sure to enjoy a healthy living and stay in good
conditions⑧ all your life.
教师点评
作者首先指明健康的意义，然后从饮食、休息、和锻炼三个方面介绍了健康生活的具体途径，最后总结全文得出结论，层次分明，条理清晰。谚语、短语和高级词汇的使用为文章增色不少如normal,remember you are what you eat,lead to等等。当然文章中也存在一些需要改进的地方，建议修改如下：
① 把health改为healthy。keep为系动词，后接形容词
② Good的前面加A，并把good 改为小写。
③ 把many改为much。sugar 为不可数名词。
④ 把Eat改为Eating。eating 为动名词作主语。
⑤ 把sometime改为sometimes。sometimes意思为“有时”。
⑥ 把help改为helps。
⑦ 把like改为as。as意思为“按照”。
⑧ 把conditions改为 condition。in good condition 为介词短语意思为“状态良好”。
【范文】
Healthy living
Good healthy is the most valuable thing a person can keep healthy, you must
eat the right foods ,get enough sleep ,and have normal exercise.
A good diet is very important for good foods with too much sugar and more high-protein foods,vegetables,and er you are what you
ting is the main cause of overweight.
Enough sleep is also must get 8 or 9 hours of sleep every t
enough sleep ,you will feel tired and sometimes anxious. Please make sure that you have enough
sleep every day.
Finally,take normal exercise every se helps you fight against diseases and lose
weigh-----makingyou strong and g running,swimming,bicycling,basketball,tabletennis
are all good exercises.
If you can do as the above, you are sure to enjoy a healthy living and stay in good condition
all your life.
巩固写作
你是一名健康营养专家，欲到上海师范大学附中作关于如何保持身体健康的报告，请根据下面的内容提示，写一篇健康报告。
1．要想身体健康需养成良好的饮食习惯。
2．具体来说：
要吃水果和蔬菜；不要吃含有大量脂肪和糖份的垃圾食物
要有充足的睡眠；不要熬夜；
要多参加体育锻炼；不要懒惰, 不要整天玩电脑游戏。
要均衡饮食；不要偏食。
注意：1.短文须包括所有的内容要点，可以适当增加细节, 使行文连贯。
2．词数： 120左右。
It’s of great importance for us to keep healthy in our everyday life. Here is some advice for
you to follow.
First,to keep healthy，you must have a healthy diet habit. It’s necessary to eat enough fresh
fruits and vegetables, because they are very rich in vitamins But do not eat too such fat and
anything too fatty or salty, which have a bad effect on your health.
Second, enough sleep is needed for your health. After a day’s work, we must have a good rest
to save more energy for another day’s work. So you had better not stay up and work too late. In
addition, doing more exercise is a good way to make you healthy. You don’t be lazy or play computer games all the day. Using your brains actively can help improve your health.
Above all, you should have a balanced diet and eat all kinds of foods. You eat certain foods
that you are interested in, which cannot benefit you.
Thank you.
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