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2018年雅思写作范文：Lectures
雅思写作：In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching
large numbers of student, but now with the development of technology
for education, many people think there is no justification for attending
lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
雅思写作大作文示例
Although lectures are normally used to teach students
knowledge, there has been an argument that students no longer need
to attend lectures, due to the development of technology. Personally, I
think that lectures deserve a place in the education system.
Instead of attending lectures, people can depend on computers
and the internet to improve learning outcomes. One benefit of using
social networking websites is that they can keep the pace of learning
by themselves and manage to make the most of time and resources.
This educational model is important especially for those people who
have work commitments. They are likely to outperform in the related
area easier.
Another approach to replace lectures is to register for online
courses, and this can help people pursue a higher educational
qualifications. Online courses provide people with opportunities to gain
access to knowledge without paying educational expenses. In this way,
they are more likely to pursue a university degree, especially for those
from disadvantaged backgrounds.
On the other hand, attending lectures plays an inevitably role
in preparing people for their future career. It offers an environment
where students are encouraged to communicate with each other and
build up a network of contacts, which is beneficial to improving their
interpersonal skills. This can help them make a transition to the
workplace.
To summarise, I believe that attending lectures remains the
most important way for students to acquire new knowledge and
achieve good performance, although technology and the internet are
likely to make learning more easily.
雅思写作大作文批改：
gh lectures are normally used to teach students
knowledge, there has been an argument that students no longer need
to attend lectures, due to the development of technology.
There is no error in this sentence. It just sounds better and
more natural without "knowledge". In English, lectures GIVE students
knowledge, and lectures teach students CONCEPTS or INFORMATION.
In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching large
numbers of student, but now with the development of technology for
education, many people think there is no justification for attending
ally, I think that lectures deserve a place in the
education system.
"Educational" is an adjective that describes the "system". The
word "education" is NOT an adjective.
educational model is important especially for those
people who have work commitments.
This educational model is important, especially for those
people whom have work commitments.
Another suggestion might be: "This educational model is
important, especially for those people who have commitments such as
work or family."
are likely to outperform in the related area easier.
There is nothing wrong with this sentence, but it may not
logically flow with the rest of the essay.
courses provide people with opportunities to gain
access to knowledge without payingfor educational expenses.
Need to add preposition. For more information, search for
phrasal verbs
this way, they students are more likely to pursue a
university degree, especially for thosefrom with disadvantaged
backgrounds.
If we use the word "they" too much, it becomes unclear what
"they" means. There is no error, but it just makes writing more clear.
We would say people WITH disadvantaged backgrounds or we
could say people WHO COME FROM disadvantaged backgrounds.
On the other hand, attending lectures plays an inevitable role
in preparing people for their future careers.
"Inevitable" was just misspelled.
We need to use "careers" because if we don't, then that would
imply that all those people would have one and only one collected
career that they would somehow share. This is a very common
technical mistake.
For example, we would want to say "Teachers help students
with their futures." not "Teachers help students with their future."
can help them make a transition into the workplace.
Preposition. There is a great book called "The Only Grammar
Book You Will Ever Need" for these very minor subtle errors.
summarise, I believe that attending lectures remains the
most important way for students to acquire new knowledge and
achieve good performance, although technology and the internet are
likely to make learning easier.
You can make it better by writing:
"To summarise, I believe that attending lectures remains the
most important way for students to acquire new knowledge and
achieve good performance, although technology and the internet are
likely to facilitate learning."
